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mother earth is pregnant;

her curves yawn -
molasses stretches of dark,
dank night freckled with
streetlights sparkling.

i yearn to rest in the cradle
that the small of her back
has become.

the roads untangle like
veins unto her skin
after being held so long
in the fist of pre-dawn.

drunk in slumber, red-eyed,
beautiful - morning will
come yet, the small child
born in the rafters of
catastrophe, aching;

but before her date,
mother earth shifts in her sleep,
love settling in the wing
of her hip -
exhaustion dilutes her blood,
consciousness touches her golden
shoulder on his way out the door.
i don't know how to describe what "beautiful" is
it's all personal opinion
somehow, that feels wrong
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Given 2014-06-08
the world doesn't need beauty sleep by forshepard is, as the suggester says, a piece of gorgeous metaphorical imagery with a fantastic narrative. ( Suggested by chromeantennae and Featured by inknalcohol )
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ZincxTheZai Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2017
¯\_(ツ)_/¯ please kill me
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2017
you've commented this elsewhere. what do you mean?
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ZincxTheZai Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2017
hi
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This really does have some of the best imagery I've ever seen when describing beauty and nature. I feel like this is what I aspire to write when I'm writing about the same subjects. :heart:
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014
thank you so much :heart:
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redhawk1986 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
I love this! May I feature this in my group? It's called "New Poetry".
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
thank you! absolutely~ it would be an honor! :heart:
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redhawk1986 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Cool!
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
ah, thank you so much! you're so kind! :love:
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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
congratulations on the DD! I just loved the whole peice especially the first few lines!
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
thank you! that is a huge compliment coming from you! :heart:
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hgfggg Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
why am i taking this so literally
this is incredibly clever
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
ah, thank you! 
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jendiir Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
sweeping in all the best ways. beautifully crafted
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
thank you so much!
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bittersweet-ink Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
fantastic imagery :clap:
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
thank you! :love:
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Edges-to-Everything Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
i yearn to rest in the cradle
that the small of her back
has become.


This is observation and imagination at its finest. :heart:
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
i had that line slide into my mind on the first time i ever flew in an airplane just a few weeks ago. it was nothing short of breathtaking.

thank you. :heart:
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Edges-to-Everything Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
Being high above the clouds is something everyone should experience at least once in their lives. It saddens me to think that many people will never know that particular joy.

:heart:
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
i agree!

:heart:
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iKittenTheGreat Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Beautiful.
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
thank you!
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iKittenTheGreat Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Anytime!
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations! This is truly beautiful :heart:
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
thank you so much! :heart:
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SpriteBlayde Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Congratulations on the DD! It's well deserved. Lovely piece, please don't ever stop writing. :)
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
ah, thank you so much! trust me - i have no plans of stopping anytime in this lifetime or the next! :D
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SpriteBlayde Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome. :D And yay!
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014   Writer
much deserved :heart::heart:
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
thank you! :heart:
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LissieBull Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
That is an wonderful piece, I enjoyed reading it,  thanks for sharing :)
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
thank you so much!
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LissieBull Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014
You`re welcome :)
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straight-butch29 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're right. The word "beautiful" isn't supposed to be described with words :heart: 
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
it's more of a feeling, at least i think so. 
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Tales-of-Tao Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Student General Artist
Absolutely stunning. You definitely deserved the Daily Deviation. Congratulations, dear! :tighthug:
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
thank you so much! :tighthug:
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014   Writer
Congratulations on your DD! :party: 
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
thanks! :love:
(that is the cutest emote ever.)
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014   Writer
Isn't it just?! :giggle:
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is a breath-taking twist on the perspective of beauty. I love how this stands out :heart:
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
thank you so much!
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TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Professional Writer
It is a personal opinion, a personal perspective, and each one is right, in its own way. :heart:
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hypnicjerks Featured By Owner May 30, 2014
:heart:
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beauty is an interesting concept. :)
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